busboys and poets

Day 1. 8:43am. Prosper. Prosper looked up as a dark-haired man paused beside her and the boy, telling them to find shelter. Eyebrows knotted, she opened her mouth to protest--why ...

Day One, 8:42. Prosper An explosion! An explosion? Prosper flung herself backwards, rolling awkwardly to avoid crushing her guitar, and covered her head with her arms. What the hell was ...

Here's an idea: spell your title correctly. It will predispose your critiquers to being kind.

Day 1, 8:35 AM. Prosper. Prosper gave the boy in front of her a crooked grin--though she supposed she couldn't really call him a boy. He was quite a bit ...

Prosper's fingers moved from one position to another, landing surely in their positions on the strings; the guitar's strap scraped across the nape of her neck. "The road gets cold--there's ...

"Skys" should be "skies." "My friend are deeply concerned" should be "My friends are deeply concerned." The word "abet" there is just... awkward. Actually, the language of this is all ...

Cute little ditty, but not a poem. Better luck in future endeavours.

This is the sort of thing you find in those annoying chain emails--you know, the ones where the sender wants to look like he or she cares about an issue, ...

I'm afraid I have to contradict Alainna on one thing: you need not begin lines with Capital Letters in a poem. You can, of course, but it's perfectly acceptable in ...

If you didn't sign up, please go away and spare us your childish antics. Oh, and tell your friend not to inflict your poetry on us again. Thank you. :D

...Okay. I started to do a line-by-line critique of this piece, but, forgive me, it's just not worth it. The entire concept is hackneyed, and not even presented in a ...

Full Name: Prosper (goes by one name) Gender: Female Age: 21 Birthplace: New Orleans, LA Occupation: Street Performer Speech: Light New Orleans accent. (Note, to those of you unfamiliar; a ...

The sarcasm was not appreciated or necessary, Alice. 1) Poetry does not have to be capitalized. I don't capitalize mine for a reason. 2) Yes, it is supposed to have ...

The first two are pretty--and I want to steal your dog and snuggle him myself--and the photo of the eclipse is good, if somewhat blurry. None of them are quite ...

While this is, as previous critiquers have pointed out, occasionally inconsistent, it's a lovely little piece and shows a lot of potential--especially since you say you rarely write poetry. Do ...